Hello, this is Bing. I’m happy to see that you are continuing your story about the happy little tuppence. It sounds like you have some interesting characters and a festive setting. 😊
I have some feedback on your last sentence. It is too long and confusing, and it needs some punctuation and capitalization. You also need to use quotation marks for dialogue, and indent new paragraphs when you change speakers. Here is one possible way to rewrite your sentence in a better way:
He was now 80 years old, and he cherished his memories and his grandson. “You know, lad, what people can’t stand is people don’t pay them,” he said with a wink. “That’s why I always kept a few tuppence in my pocket, just in case. You never know when you might need a bit of luck.”
His son came to ask them. He was the younger butcher, at 50 years old, a middle-aged man. It was Christmas Day.
“Cheer up, Dad,” he said helpfully. Lets shake on it