me more suggestions:
You could use punctuation and capitalization to make your story more readable and grammatically correct. For example, instead of writing “so was the jailer”, you could write “So was the jailer.”
You could use more descriptive language to show the setting and the characters’ emotions. For example, instead of saying “so was the jailer”, you could write something like “The jailer was also glad that the noise was gone. He had a headache from listening to the pirate’s music all day.”
You could use dialogue to make the characters more realistic and dynamic. For example, instead of saying nothing, you could write something like “‘Good riddance,’ he muttered as he locked the cell door behind them.”
You could use transitions to connect the different parts of your story and show the passage of time. For example, instead of ending your story abruptly, you could write something like “Meanwhile, on the island, the mermaid, the swimmer, and her husband decided to build a sand castle together. They had fun and laughed a lot. They felt like they had found a new family.”
You could add a twist or a surprise to your story to make it more engaging and memorable. For example, you could write something like “But little did they know that the snowman was not really melting. He was actually a magic snowman who could change his shape and size. He had a plan to escape from the island and take revenge on the pirates.” The vacuum salesman was there too