hat says “then the sun came out phew said the milkman he wished he could take off his hat and coat for it was summer time”. Is this part of your story or a comment that you are making? If it is part of your story, I think it is a bit abrupt and inconsistent. How can the sun come out after a heavy rain? Why is the milkman wearing a hat and coat in summer time? If you want to end your story with a happy note, you could write something like this: