The milkman holiday

hat says โ€œthen the sun came out phew said the milkman he wished he could take off his hat and coat for it was summer timeโ€. Is this part of your story or a comment that you are making? If it is part of your story, I think it is a bit abrupt and inconsistent. How can the sun come out after a heavy rain? Why is the milkman wearing a hat and coat in summer time? If you want to end your story with a happy note, you could write something like this: